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many manufactured food and drink product contain high level of sugar, which causes many health problem. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is said that foods and beverages which include carbohydrates should become more expensive so which decreases people's consumption as they are harmful to the body. Admittedly I completely agree with
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 is a cheap ingredient for making a product so product made of carbohydrate is affordable for many people to buy as snacks.
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 will result in more
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 consumption which may result in a dramatic increase in diabetes in society. By making sugary
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 more expensive, individuals take alternatives into consideration. Another benefit of launching
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 containing
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, pupils in school will be more productive.
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 it may seem irrelevant, there are researches showing that consuming mal nutritious foods like
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 will result in poor performance of children in school. An increase in the price of sugary
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 as candies and chocolates forces children to buy nutritious snacks like nuts. In conclusion, policies which make sugary
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 more expensive have numerous benefits for society. The most obvious one is improving general health and making children more concentrated in school.
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