People watch foreign films much more than locally produced films.Why?Should government fund local film industries.

In many
countries
especially in developing
countries
foreign movies are
popular
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than
the
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locally made
films
.There are several reasons for
this
trend and the government
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should greatly contribute to promoting domestic movies for the
overall
progress of the
industry
. The main reason people prefer movies from other
countries
is the quality of the movie.It is often noticed that locally made
films
in many
countries
lack better
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don't
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have
necessary
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depth to touch the hearts of the audience.
Moreover
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foreign
films
have a great variation and they are more enjoyable than
the
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domestic
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.In my
opinion
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thegovernment
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the government
should support the film
industry
in order to support
this
industry
encourage people to enjoy more domestically produced
films
and gain international acclimation for quality
movie
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movies
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.Each country has some talented producers ,actors and filmmakers who for the lack of financial and political support bring out the best.
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help for the movie
industry
would bring more audiences to the theatre to enjoy those
films
would and earn more ticket money. In
conclusion
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the film
industry
in each country should be supported by the government it would make local
films
popular and earn money and fame for the country
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