Some people believe that children should spend all of their free time with their families. Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss the possible arguments on both sides, and say which side you personally support.
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time
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should always play with their families. Personally, I can neither completely agree nor disagree with Use synonyms
this
statement for a variety of reasons.
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. One of the main reasons that Fix the agreement mistake
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children
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Moreover
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For example
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can be more responsible. Use synonyms
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is because they can do whatever they want and take responsibility for what they do or the consequence that they cause, parent Linking Words
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needs
their
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Secondly
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can help Use synonyms
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become more independent just by doing their homework or housework without help. Use synonyms
For instance
, if there a hard homework and they need to do it without help, they need to Linking Words
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by themselves, they can used to Change the verb
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work
alone and can help them become more independent.
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children
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should spend their free Use synonyms
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still get their privacy and they can grow in every way.Use synonyms
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