Some people believe that children should spend all of their free time with their families. Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss the possible arguments on both sides, and say which side you personally support.

It is commonly argued that in free
time
children
should always play with their families. Personally, I can neither completely agree nor disagree with
this
statement for a variety of reasons. I partly agree that
children
should spend
time
with their
family
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. One of the main reasons that
children
will get more
time
to talk and share or
playing
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with their family.
This
means that it
help
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the relationship between
children
and their family will be better. Another reason can be that
parents
can control their
children
, they can keep their
children
away from
phone
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or explain to their
children
what they need to avoid from
the
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social media,
however
, if
parents
supervise their
children
too tight,
parents
will
violates
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of
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children
’s privacy so it can cause discomfort to their
children
.
Moreover
, spending
time
with family can help
children
learn many skills from their
parents
or
also
brother or sister.
For example
,
children
can know how to do petty things or housework only by watching and when they do it, they can get help from their
parents
,
it
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which
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can help
children
learning
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how to do it proficiently too.
On the other hand
, I
also
agree with the viewpoint that
kids
spending all the
time
with their family can affect negatively
to
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the
kids
.
Firstly
, by spending
time
alone or with their friends,
children
can be more responsible.
This
is because they can do whatever they want and take responsibility for what they do or the consequence that they cause, parent
also
need to explain to their
kids
what they can do and what they can not.
For example
,
a
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child
breaking
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a flower pot,
so
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that child
need
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to admit their fault so that the child be more responsible and it can help them in
their
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future.
Secondly
,
kids
doing their work without help from
parents
can help
kids
become more independent just by doing their homework or housework without help.
For instance
, if there a hard homework and they need to do it without help, they need to
trying
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by themselves, they can used to
work
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alone and can help them become more independent. In conclusion,
although
family
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are very important and
children
got their privacy, I’m convinced that
children
should spend their free
time
with family but they
also
have
time
to do whatever they like and their
parents
shouldn’t supervise them
to
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tight so
children
still get their privacy and they can grow in every way.
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