Some people believe that children should spend all of their free time with their families. Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss the possible arguments on both sides, and say which side you personally support.
It is commonly argued that in free
time
children
should always play with their families. Personally, I can neither completely agree nor disagree with this
statement for a variety of reasons.
I partly agree that children
should spend time
with their family
. One of the main reasons that Fix the agreement mistake
families
children
will get more time
to talk and share or playing
with their family. Wrong verb form
play
This
means that it help
the relationship between Change the verb form
helps
children
and their family will be better. Another reason can be that parents
can control their children
, they can keep their children
away from phone
or explain to their Fix the agreement mistake
phones
children
what they need to avoid from the
social media, Correct article usage
apply
however
, if parents
supervise their children
too tight, parents
will violates
Change the verb form
violate
of
Change preposition
apply
children
’s privacy so it can cause discomfort to their children
. Moreover
, spending time
with family can help children
learn many skills from their parents
or also
brother or sister. For example
, children
can know how to do petty things or housework only by watching and when they do it, they can get help from their parents
, it
can help Correct pronoun usage
which
children
learning
how to do it proficiently too.
Wrong verb form
learn
On the other hand
, I also
agree with the viewpoint that kids
spending all the time
with their family can affect negatively to
the Change preposition
apply
kids
. Firstly
, by spending time
alone or with their friends, children
can be more responsible. This
is because they can do whatever they want and take responsibility for what they do or the consequence that they cause, parent also
need to explain to their kids
what they can do and what they can not. For example
, a
child Correct word choice
if a
breaking
a flower pot, Wrong verb form
breaks
so
that child Correct word choice
apply
need
to admit their fault so that the child be more responsible and it can help them in Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
their
future. Change the word
the
Secondly
, kids
doing their work without help from parents
can help kids
become more independent just by doing their homework or housework without help. For instance
, if there a hard homework and they need to do it without help, they need to trying
by themselves, they can used to Change the verb
try
work
alone and can help them become more independent.
In conclusion, Wrong verb form
working
although
family
are very important and Add an article
the family
children
got their privacy, I’m convinced that children
should spend their free time
with family but they also
have time
to do whatever they like and their parents
shouldn’t supervise them to
tight so Replace the word
too
children
still get their privacy and they can grow in every way.Submitted by yeshomeclass on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?