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Some people believe that young people know about international pop and movie stars but know very less about famous people from the history in their own country. Why is this? How can more interest be created in young people to gain more knowledge about their own famous people from history?

#people #pop #movie #stars #history #country #interest #gain
It is conclusive that today we are flooded with facts about everything. Most
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children
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 aware
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 famous
people
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 are progressively
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 about their individual historical character.
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 to discuss
reasons
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the reasons
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of
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 these problems which are linking today's popular
people
 and in the past historical humans. The most important cause for
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the teaching structure
the
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 world. Nowadays
children
 are fluently organizing the field they are interested
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 So
children
 are
connecting
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 to exciting movies and international pop. But they don't know their
history
.
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 condition. In the past there was
not
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 development maybe that's why
children
 are not interested
to
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they
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. But
our
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 heroes of our past were stronger than today's
people
. Nowadays
children
 are
teached
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reached
 about
was
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history
 by their teachers in
the
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schools. It is
good
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 situation. Because
child
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 must know her
history
. The solutions are
little
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 difficult. The historical buildings and museums should
built
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 by
government
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. And
children
 are gone the historical museums with their parents.
This
 help
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children
's worldview. Parents should pay
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attention to their
children
 and should control them. So all the right. In
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 young
people
 may know
about
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 famous
people
 from
history
 than international pop and movie stars. By taking these measures we can help young
people
 to gain a greater appreciation for their own county's rich
history
 and the individuals who helped shape it.
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