level of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the word what are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions.

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grown dramatically around the world. Young

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everywhere are suffering more than ever before which can cause them to There are

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of solutions which should be implemented to deal with youth crime.

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of youth crime is rising, different

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of mental disorders are

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shortage of qualified nurses and doctors around the world. When

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are struggling mentally but not getting treated, they tend to implement problematic

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which can lead them to do

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young

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are living under increasing

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of pressure. They see

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that other teenagers have on social media all the time. If they are not able to afford those

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it might seem tempting to get them by any means. There are several ways to prevent young

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, there should be more resources to support adolescents and offer them help when it is needed. Having at least one trustful adult in their life can make a difference when it comes to preventing youth crime. In every

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be enough interesting

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they enjoy they would not have time to commit

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. In conclusion, I believe that the increasing number of mental health problems and the pressure that young

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reasons why they commit more

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, offering help and organising activities for adolescents can help

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Topic Vocabulary:

youth crime
increasing rapidly
socioeconomic factors
breakdown of family structure
influence of peer pressure
lack of education
lack of employment opportunities
substance abuse
inadequate law enforcement
media and technology
poverty
inequality
gang culture
juveniles
criminal behavior
delinquency
criminal activities
antisocial behavior
youth offenders
recidivism

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