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What are your views on the false means of advertising used by media agencies?

In recent years, tv and radio commercials are continuously increasing as more products and items are being available in the market. Most companies would have their own marketing team to introduce their products to the people
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, some marketing firms tend to deviate from the normal advertising techniques even
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 beyond false advertising. As a regular consumer, I completely oppose
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 type of advertisement. Media companies would argue that it's part of their strategy
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 a large number of
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 but it doesn't justify the false information they are giving to their customers. Commercial ads should be truthful and must show only facts about the product being endorsed.
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, the details of the product should not mislead the buyers just to get more profits. Doing
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 style of commercials have bad effects
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 consumers
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 the brand itself. Buying
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something you like because of the very encouraging ads but different from the actual item is totally disappointing. One good example is, a whitening lotion claiming to be effective by just using it for two days and being
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 by a very fair and flawless lady,
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 in reality achieving
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whiter skin is highly improbable in a short span of time.
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,
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 fake advertising can
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 damage the image of the brand in the long run when people get to discover and experience the real quality of the product. On
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 final note, I strongly disagree
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false means of advertising and encourage the consumer to be more diligent, cautious and meticulous in buying products because of the
commercial
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commercials
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the
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seen
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.

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