The table shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009.

The table shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009.
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The given table illustrates the percentage of
school
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children attending 4 different types of secondary
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from 2000 to 2009.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the specialist, grammar and voluntary-controlled
schools
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experienced a downward trend in the number of pupils, in comparison the community
schools
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experienced an upward trend in secondary
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education during the same period. At the beginning of the period, voluntary-controlled
schools
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became the most significant providers of secondary
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,
while
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specialist
schools
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became the lowest provider, and they declined by the same percentage. In 2005, grammar and voluntary-controlled
schools
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continued to decline, grammar
schools
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decreased to 19% from 52%, respectively.
At the end
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of the period, three types of
schools
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diminished to 10%, 12% and 20%.
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, in 2000 years,
although
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community
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is the lowest provider of secondary
school
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, during years increased by a considerable rate. And in 2005 it achieved 32 per cent from 12 per cent. And
at the end
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of, it can rise gradually to 58%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words school, schools with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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