The charts show the main methods of transport of people travelling to one university in 2004 and 2009.

The charts show the main methods of transport of people travelling to one university in 2004 and 2009.
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The pie charts illustrate the percentages of different types of transport
of
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people travelling to one university in the years 2004 and 2009.
Overall
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car
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cars
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and
bus
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buses
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had the highest figures in both years, but
train
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trains
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had the lowest one.
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, the figure for
bus
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the bus
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had
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significant growth,
while
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the opposite was true for that of
car
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in 2009. Car accounted for the highest percentage of 51% in 2004, falling dramatically
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23% in 2009. An opposite pattern was seen in the figure for
bus
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buses
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, going up remarkably from 33% in 2004 to 46% in 2009 Meanwhile, the percentage of
bicycle
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bicycles
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stood at 9% in 2004 and
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had a considerable climb of 7% in 2009,
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train
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trains
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had the lowest figures, with 3% in 2004 and 4% in 2009. The proportion of people walking witnessed a slight increase from 4% in 2004 to 6% in 2009.
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