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Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some individuals believe that investing
on
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 different forms of
art
such
 as music and theatre is not vital, and the government ought to allocate more budget
in
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 public services. In my opinion investment in different types of
art
 as the heritage and the culture of each place, must be in parallel with public services like
healthcare
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system
. As mentioned above,
art
 is an important heritage for every culture and the government must invest in protecting and
foster
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 ancient arts
such
 as music, theatre, sculpture,etc. because
art
 is
neccessary
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necessary
 for each community to be involved with their
anciant
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ancient
 or modern culture.
as
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 well as
this
,
art
 helps
people
 to
be relive
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 of daily stress and it is considered
as
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an
intertanment
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entertainment
internment
 in their boring lives.
On the other hand
, putting on important public services like
healthcare
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system
, educational
system
 and transportation is a vital requirement for
people
's well-being, and it is essential for higher standards of living.
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, possessing
the
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high quality
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 transportation
system
 like
high standard
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 road instruction or
high quality
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of
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public transportation could be
cuased
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caused
 more satisfaction and wealth.
In
addition
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,addition
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 having advanced healthcare
centers
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helps
people
 to
having
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 a sense of
peacfulness
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peacefulness
. In conclusion, putting on arts as an
intertanment
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entertainment
internment
 and protecting ancient heritage is
neccessary
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necessary
 for the society,
simillar
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similar
people
needs
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 to enjoyments of public facilities to possess a sense of well-being.
Therefore
 governments must invest
equal
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 in both sides of devoting.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural enrichment
  • expression of creativity
  • promote diversity
  • enhance social cohesion
  • boost tourism
  • job creation
  • stimulate economic growth
  • improve quality of life
  • essential services
  • maintenance and development
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