Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some individuals believe that investing

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different forms of

art

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as music and theatre is not vital, and the government ought to allocate more budget

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public services. In my opinion investment in different types of

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as the heritage and the culture of each place, must be in parallel with public services like

healthcare

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. As mentioned above,

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is an important heritage for every culture and the government must invest in protecting and

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ancient arts

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as music, theatre, sculpture,etc. because

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for each community to be involved with their

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or modern culture.

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art

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helps

people

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of daily stress and it is considered

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intertanment

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entertainment

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in their boring lives.

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, putting on important public services like

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system

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, educational

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and transportation is a vital requirement for

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's well-being, and it is essential for higher standards of living.

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high quality

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road instruction or

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public transportation could be

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more satisfaction and wealth.

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having advanced healthcare

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a sense of

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peacefulness

. In conclusion, putting on arts as an

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entertainment

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and protecting ancient heritage is

neccessary

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necessary

for the society,

simillar

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similar

people

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needs

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to enjoyments of public facilities to possess a sense of well-being.

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governments must invest

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in both sides of devoting.

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IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

237 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

cultural enrichment
expression of creativity
promote diversity
enhance social cohesion
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job creation
stimulate economic growth
improve quality of life
essential services
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Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. Do you agree or disagree?

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