Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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, a group of people claim that the government should prohibit the
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of dangerous
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others defend that people are free to take part in
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and activities that make them happy. From my
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I would argue that people should be free to
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such
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as they wish. On the one hand, there is a range of reasons why risky
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should be prohibited from being taken by the populace. First and foremost, is common knowledge that
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activities accidentally cause serious injuries
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the athletes, the person can break some bones, or something can happen and affect their physical health, and probably will be incapacitated for a long period.
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, some dangerous
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,
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as boxing,
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martial art, or even American football, mostly represent violence.
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audience particularly teenagers, would probably be encouraged to reproduce what they saw. On another hand, proponents of
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just have as
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the right to be free to make choices and these include
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, they are not analyzing the risks.
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, in Portugal, for a long
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they had as entertainment activity bulls
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, and the population enjoyed watching,
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the had many deaths during the exhibition, so, extreme
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sometimes can be fatal, so, the government
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of banning, they should regulate. They must force the companies who
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dangerous
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to be more
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about the procedures and the
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equipment’s
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. In conclusion, I think that citizens are at liberate to play dangerous
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and activities, but they must be regulated and
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precaution
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • severe injuries
  • fatalities
  • base jumping
  • bull running
  • extreme skiing
  • safeguard
  • well-being
  • regulating
  • avoidable harm
  • healthcare costs
  • burdening
  • personal freedom
  • autonomy
  • training
  • equipment
  • mitigated
  • personal satisfaction
  • mental health benefits
  • resilience
  • adventure
  • assess risks
  • public safety
  • unnecessary healthcare costs
  • outright bans
  • balanced approach
  • stringent safety standards
  • mandatory training sessions
  • adequately informed
  • safeguarding
  • public health
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