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Band 4.5

People think that old buildings should be knocked down and give way to the new buildings. Do you agree or disagree?

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With the development of our country, the existence of
large
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 amount of old
buildings
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 has been a serious problem. I agree that old
buildings
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 should be knocked down and give way to the new
buildings
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. Replace the old
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 with new
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 will create a better look of the city. With the changing of social aesthetics, the appearance of these
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 which have long
historys
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history
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 is no longer being seen as popular, but as old and outdated.
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, some of them were constructed in a random way that their existences have
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 one of the resistances to urban planning.
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, since they were built years ago when the building technology had not been developed as much as it is today, after years of
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, there are many
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 issues that might affect the life safety of the people living there. But there are some other opinions that we should keep these old
buildings
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. They consider that many
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 still look beautiful
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nowadays, and they
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 carry culture and history. On the
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 risks, they believe that we can solve
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 problem with more
security
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 checks and fixing the issue we find on time. But I think, most of the
buildings
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 don’t have a good look, and only some of them have the value of culture or history. Checking the
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 problem more is not only hard to accomplish but
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 high spending. In conclusion, I believe that we should take down old constructions. It will create a better look of the city
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Heritage conservation
  • Historical edifice
  • Cultural legacy
  • Architectural marvel
  • Preservationist
  • Urban landscape
  • Economic revitalization
  • Tourist hub
  • Adaptive reuse
  • Cultural fabric
  • Aesthetic appeal
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Civic identity
  • Preservation criteria
  • Structural integrity
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