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modern form of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their frieds. this has had a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the modern digital era, letters are replaced by email and social gatherings are organized over InternetInternet. The modern way of communication has reduced the amount of time that
people
 used to spend seeing their friends. I truly agree that
this
 has a negative effect on the human race and in
this
 essay I will put forward a few factors supporting my perspective.
Firstly
, at present
people
 are extremely busy in their life. They find it very difficult to socialise. Earlier gatherings were organized on a timely basis. But nowadays with emerging
internet
 ,facilities everything is shifted online. Now
people
 don't spare time to hand together,
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 they just meet up over messaging websites or applications like WhatsApp. In many celebrations,
people
 attend the event virtually. And recently, news came in Italy where two
people
 fall in love over the
internet
 and got married online as well. The
internet
 has provided us with a great opportunity to keep connected for
people
 living abroad or far away. The
Internet
 is an instant way to see them or communicate with them. But,
people
 living a few metres away should not use the technology in
this
 manner. In a nutshell, I completely agree that modern forms of communication have evidently reduced the amount of time
people
 spend seeing their friends. And it
definitelyhas
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definitely has
a negative impact on their social lives.
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