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In many countries today, the eating habits and lifestyle of children are different from those of previous generations. Some people say this has had a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#countries #habits #lifestyle #children #generations #people #effect #health
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the
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years the habits have clearly changed, and
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these days there
a
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lot
of
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more
healths
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problems
 than before, but why? In my
opinion
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 we can
atributte
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attribute
 that to the modern
lifestyle
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fast foods, processed or
caned
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 foods are pretty popular
also
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 the lack of exercise the children have. All of
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 habits are leading us to the so
well known
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 sedentary life,
this
 is one of the main causes of
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poor
health
 in kids. With
that
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 so many adults have
health
problems
,
life
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 diabetes or stomach
problems
. In the past
these kind
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 of life didn't exist, all of the children were physically active, and have a natural diet,
also
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persons
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 didn't eat a lot of sugar or meals with a lot of fat. With that
say
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 I think that the
lifestyle
 these days is much poor than before, nobody cares about their
health
 they think more
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 the easy way to get things
,
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 and don't do much than the necessary.
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 is killing the children in a
slowly
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 way, making them more
propense
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prone
 to have
health
problems
. The old
lifestyle
 is a
prove
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 why there it is so many old people with
a
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good
health
. In
conclusion
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 the old
lifestyle
 was
a
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way better than the nowadays
lifestyle
, so we must have more conscience
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 how we live our lives.
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