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Science will soon make people live up to 100 or even 200 years. Some believe this is a good thing while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#science #people #years #believe
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of
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life still always
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 obsession for Humen for a long time .It is a
mestery
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mystery
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people
 spend more time
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longivility
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longevity
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not
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satisfied
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.
Anowadays
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Nowadays
,the big progress in
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 science make
this
 possibility real.The
people
 are decided
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groupe
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group
 that agree with the idea and
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other group
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reject
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 it. On
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 hand ,
people
how
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 agree said that
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people
 live
extra
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 years is exciting and they can do all of
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thing
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things
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 that they like ,
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 they will get many and enjoy
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themselves with
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.In
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other
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 they will realize their dreams .
On the other hand
,
telhe
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the
 second group refuse
this
 idea from the start ,their argument is based on the fact that
thie
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it
 is the work of god and is antireligion to think like that we are just a creature and we should accept all the
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 of our god.
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,make
people
 live
an extra years
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extra years
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 in antinature and will
causes
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 in the future many problems and imbalance
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the
humunity
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humanity
community
.
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,every one of us
want
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 to live for many many years but is
contrenature
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contracture
and behind
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reality
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sometimes
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 antireligion . Personally
speaking
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leave
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the
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nature
take
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it
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 distinction is the better choice.
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