Some people say that to prevent illness and disease, governments should focus more on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
this
contemporary world, diseases are being increased rapidly and
also
several new issues are arising.
However
, there are individuals who opine that environmental pollution and housing issues should be controlled by the government in order to reduce sickness. It is somewhat true in my opinion. In
this
essay, I will state my clear opinion.
Firstly
, the main reasons for environmental issues are the increased number of motor vehicles which
emits
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harmful gas which affects both humans and the surroundings. The department should conduct
test
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for every
vehicles
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and should impose strict fines on
the
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illegal
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.
Apart from
this
, the authorities can
also
increase the public transport facilities which will reduce the usage of private vehicles on the road which will surely decrease
the
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pollution.
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reason is the burning of unwanted chemicals which damages the respiratory system
as well as
the ozone layer.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preventive healthcare
  • environmental regulations
  • respiratory diseases
  • public health policies
  • sanitation facilities
  • urban planning
  • communicable diseases
  • socio-economic factors
  • sustainable development
  • government intervention
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • industrial emissions
  • air quality index
  • affordable housing
  • mental wellbeing
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