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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)
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The
graph
 illustrates
air
pollutants
 from various
of
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resources in the UK from 1990 to 2005.
Overall
air
pollutants
were
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declined from seven to three
milloin
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million
 tonnes within fifteen years. But between 1999 to 2002 the
graph
reveales
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reveals
revealed
 the impurity production
a
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near-stagnation state. The
pullution
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pollution
 was produced by different sources in
mentioned
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graph
. So on, the highest yield of
manufacture
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air
pollutants
 is the industry sector
then
 transportation and households in order. Focus on contaminant production from
industry
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 section
was
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steady
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 decreased over
year
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 and
relate
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with
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a
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 direction of
entire
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graph
air
pollutants
. It is remarkable that
,
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in
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 1993 to 1996
this
 section
a
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had a
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significant decline
air
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pollutants
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pollutant
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 production from more than five to three tonnes. The generation of
hazard
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substance
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substances
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 from households slowly
dive
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compare
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compared
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 with industry.
This
 section surge reduction
in
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 1999 to 2005. But Interestingly,
air
pollutants
 from
transportation
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 segment mostly stabilized except in 1999 minimal decrease
compare
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 with 1996 and
return
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returned
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 to produce waste
to
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 the
air
 in 2002.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, air, pollutants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • air pollutants
  • emissions
  • decrease
  • increase
  • stable
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • peak
  • drop
  • significant
  • legislation
  • technological advancements
  • comparative analysis
  • contributors
  • households
  • transport
  • industry
  • regulation
  • pattern
  • anomaly
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