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some people believe that studying at university or college is the best rout to a successful career, while other believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Studying at
university
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 is a significant way to a successful
job
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. I totally agree with
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 statement.As studying at
university
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 has great benefits, why do people still believe
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 a good idea to skip studying in college and immediately work in their
job
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? Looking at other people’s arguments, say that skipping studying at
university
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 can save time and effort
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 of studying for three or four years.
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, I think
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 argument is not valid,because the main purpose of studying in college is gaining the importance of duties and information.They
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 said that the
university
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 does not teach useful things that may they get benefit in future.I
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 disagree because the main purpose of studying at
university
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 is to get the knowledge that they must know about the
job
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 to succeed in the work field .
University
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 and college teach students how can succeed in their
job
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 in future and build them to be more effective in their careers. To summarise, I would say that studying at
university
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 is the most important step to achieve in their life.Quite apart from the benefits studying is a major step that should everyone keep it.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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