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Some people think that the news media nowadays have influenced people's lives in negative ways . To what extent do you agree or disagree ???

#people #news #media #lives
It is
frequent
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 topic of discussion that the
media
 has become
main
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the main
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 part of individuals in the world. Some
people
 feel that
,
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 the reports of
media
 have affected to
lives
 of human beings in damaging ways. I try to depict my reasons and examples
as well as
 my knowledge
why
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of why
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 I do not totally agree with
this
 idea in
this
 essay. On the one hand, if individuals utilize
from
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news
media
 for good targets, it does not have
effect
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an effect
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to
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on
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people
's
lives
 in
negative
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a negative
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 way in society. Nowadays,
news
media
such
 as computers, laptops, tablets and especially mobile phones play
paramount
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 role in young
people
's
lives
as well as
elderly
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the elderly
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.
Due to
 the fact that
,
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 the demand is increasing to use distinctive
media
 for nations and various technologies are improving day by day.
Furthermore
, using
news
media
 helps to find out
news
 and information which
nessessary
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necessary
 and related to different topics (
such
 as
about
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education,
population
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and population
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 ) during individual's
lives
 in most countries around the world. Even bad
news
of
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from
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 some
media's
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media
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 can benefit
people
, as a productive way of self-guardian.
In other words
, I personally consider them
being
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to be
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 exceedingly helpful when it comes to preservation.
For example
, during
coronavirus
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the coronavirus
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 pandemic, some
people
 intensively watch and follow mass
media
 in order to decide whether it is safe to go out or not. Another case is that some regions in urban areas became dangerous to
visite
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visit
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 alone, so some renowned
media
 webpages work on providing the population with city crime conditions and locations.
Nevertheless
, sometimes
media
 pages have a pivotal role to play in
people
's safety.
To conclude
, Despite negative elements,
media
 may be considered
as
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a reliable and accurate source of
news
 for
people
.
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