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Scientists say that in the future humanity will speak the same language. Do you think this is a positive or negative social development?

#scientists #future #humanity #language #development
There is a controversial perspective heating a debate over whether using the sole
language
system
 does more harm than good for social prosperity in the upcoming years. In my opinion,
this
 phenomenon is negative to the
development
 of a nation. Without a shadow of a doubt,using
of
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only
language
 can bring tremendous benefits to societies, especially to the
development
 of the tourism industry. It is obvious that speaking in the same
language
 allows people from different parts of the words communicate easier. Which directly facilitates local citizens when introducing their culture to others. Singapore can be cited as an outstanding example. Since
this
 country
use
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 English as their mandatory
language
, they have no difficulty in welcoming visitors,
that
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 is an explanation for why their tours are famous over the
worlds
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.
Hence
, the similarity in
language
system
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systems
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 makes a great contribution to the
development
 of societies.
While
 the redeeming feature of speaking only
language
 is widely acknowledged, its counterpart still lingers. Clearly, speaking in one
language
 will directly lead to the loss of national
identities
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identity
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. On the grounds that the
language
system
 of a country, which was established and witnessed its history from day one, contains the depth of its valuable tradition. To be specific,
China
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 mother
languages
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language
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 created
thousands
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 years ago is
sticked
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 significantly to its cultural identities that no
countries
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 can bear a reference
.
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Therefore
, using the same
language
 result in the diverse loss of cultural identities. In conclusion, despite having the same
language
system
 does great benefits for the
development
 of societies,
it’s
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drawback
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 can be one of the world's severe problems.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enhanced
  • streamlining
  • diverse cultures
  • accelerate
  • exchange of information
  • erosion
  • linguistic diversity
  • dominance
  • unequal power dynamics
  • marginalizing
  • reinforce
  • economic benefits
  • reduced translation
  • diplomacy
  • acquisition
  • exacerbating
  • social inequalities
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