Some people believe that a crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of bad person’s nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Every nation needs a human culture which builds and contributes to

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their country. Many

people

say that these social issues bring up

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besides

, some

people

argue that offenders are of worse human

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crime is a result of community rather than bad human nature.

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some

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consider the reason for the criminal is an issue

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society. These days, there are a lot of problems affecting the physical and mental health of humans.

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lead to bad behaviour,

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, today young

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tend to intentionally break the law, especially traffic laws like speeding and aggressive driving ( phóng nhanh vượt ẩu), and they are not wearing

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, these

people

are reduced to poverty, they won’t know how to make a living. So, they can lose

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mind and act without thinking about the laws.

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can hurt other

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by threatening, blackmailing, robbing,

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killing

people

On the other hand

, others believe that a criminal is the result of a natural person. Today, there are a lot of children who act without thinking.

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, in an educational environment, where there are

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problems, bullying among students often occurs.

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people

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offender in the future.

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, bad characteristics

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laziness and selfishness could

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build up breed offenders. In conclusion, citizens say that

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crimes are the result of a person 's nature. But I hold the belief that social issues and property are the primary motives behind crime.

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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