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Today many people frequently change their jobs. What problems does it create? How to solve them?

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In today's world,finding a secure career is an extremely difficult task to do.It is reported that folks are changing their profession more than ever since to find
a good work
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This
 approach is bringing too many obstacles these days
such
 as shortages in one field or over staff in another field.By giving good increments or proper respect,
this
 hazard can be solved. To start with problems,the main
commpication
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complication
communication
this
 trend is bringing is depression.People get their experience from smaller companies and
then
 quit their
postion
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then
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apply for big companies to get good wages and medical benefits where the problem of overstaffing is common.
As a result
,in recessions or slow-down in markets,these co-operations usually lay-offs their employees.
For example
,recently Shopify and Amazon fired almost 25% of staff without any notice,
Nevertheless
 to say,
this
 termination leads to depression because people had no post. As solutions are concerned,Increments or proper raises are the best potential solution for
this
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.If people get their wages
according to
 their experience so they might not quit their
task
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For instance
, for a person who has over 10 years of experience but working at minimum wage,the chances are much higher that he could switch the activity to secure his future.
To conclude
,Changing work is one of the biggest problems in today's economy but with proper ,solutions
this
 can be tackled to a large extent.
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