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To succeed in a business, one needs to be good at maths. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People
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 argue that to be successful in a trade area, they have to be
expert
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 in
mathematics
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.
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 it is often viewed as an indicator of
succesfulness
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successfulness
, I believe that basic soft
skills
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 have a crucial role. On the one hand, studying
mathematics
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 needs logical thinking and more exercise to break
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 kinds of
mathematics
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 questions.
People
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 think that maths is one of the
difficult
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 subjects to be solved. Typically
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student who has passed the exam in maths, they tend to be smart and diligent. Their
coriusity
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curiosity
 to finish all of the types of math, like arithmetic, geometry, aljabar,
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 the long question regarding our daily life, make them more logical, innovative and vibrant. Indeed, their pattern of thinking logically and to always
excercise
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exercise
 bring to their habit of solving any problems.
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, when someone enters work life, those patterns support their career and
success
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 in the future.
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, not all the job areas need to be good in maths.
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, basic soft
skills
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 have an essential factor to be
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good in business and they need in all
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kinds of work. In business,
people
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 always contact the others to certain their job
are
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 running well. Obviously, to keep their connection with colleagues in the workplace or the clients on the outside, they have to approach them with soft
skills
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, like good communication, teamwork, and leadership.
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, as an individual, we must
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be good in attitudes and respect
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 others.
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, good teamwork is a key to
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success
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, so each person must be a good member or leader.
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, soft
skills
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 ensure the work environment always makes the
people
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 comfortable and they put their efforts to make their company successful. In sum,
mathematics
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 is a good factor to be a
success
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, but having soft
skills
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 is much more crucial to
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success
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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