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Some people say parent should encourage their children to participate in team activities in the free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss and give your opinion.

#people #parent #children #team #activities #time
Using different
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 is becoming more and more common nowadays. Some
people
 argue that there is no more need for interpreters
while
 others think that automatic
language
translators
 can not replace human
translators
. I
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 disagree that there is no more need for interpreters. Using mobile phones, computers or even artificial intelligence for
translation
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 will always be somehow limited and they can not compensate the human brain.
While
 automatic
language
translator
 can be really helpful and make life
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 easier,
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 still can not
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 as effectively and reliably as
human
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translator
.
Furthermore
, when using automatic
language
translation
, the
translation
 does not always make sense or the
translator
 is unable to translate the
language
. The
translation
 can
also
 be very simple and difficult to understand compared to
human
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a human
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translator
 who can explain things with different words and use richer
language
 if needed. There are plenty of
situations
 when interpreters can not be offset. If there are many
people
 talking at the same time or the situation is more complex, it can be challenging for mobile phone
translators
 to translate.
In addition
, especially older
people
 might struggle
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 online
translators
 and find it much more comfortable to use an interpreter. There are
also
situations
 when
people
 are talking about serious things and it is extremely important to make sure that the
translation
 is correct. In those
situations
 relying entirely on online
translators
 would be risky.
To conclude
,
while
 automatic
language
translators
 are becoming more clever and easy to use, there are still
situations
 when using an interpreter is
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 and more reliable option.
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