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Process of stages involved in the lifespan of the silk warm

#process #stages #lifespan #silk
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The
process
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 demonstrates the stages involved in the lifespan of the
silk
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 warm and
production
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the production
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 of
silk
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 cloth. In general,it is a cyclical natural
process
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,
consist
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 of nine steps,commencing with
laying
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the laying
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eggs
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of eggs
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 by
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silkworm
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the silkworm
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,
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and culminating with converting of
cocoon
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the cocoon
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 to
the
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a
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 butterfly.
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,
laid
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the laid
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 eggs after 10 days
transforms
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transform
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to
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into
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 the
silkworm
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larva
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.
Silkworm
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larva
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larvae
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 consume mulberry
leaf
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leaves
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 as
a
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food.Within 4-6 weeks
silkworm
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larva
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 envelop itself in
silk
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 thread in order for
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larva
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the larva
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 to become a butterfly.In 3-8 days
silkworm
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larva
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 is to be
cocoon
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a cocoon
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finally
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,finally
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 after 16
days
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,days
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silkworm
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larva
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 is turning
to
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into
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butterfly
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a butterfly
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. The following
process
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 is
manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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 of
silk
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 cloth.
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,cocoons are picked and before being unwind into 300-900m threads,
the
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they
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 are boiled.
Penultimate
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The penultimate
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 stage in
this
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process
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 is dyeing the threads.And the
last
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 step is weaving
silk
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 threads.
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