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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The data displays the summary of students enrolled in various types of
schools
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 in three different
years
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This
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schools
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 in 2000, 2005, and 2009. In the overview, the table shows a distinct number for each year with visible favouritism in voluntary-controlled
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 in the earliest
years
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 before it was taken over by
community
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schools
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 by the end. Meanwhile, both specialist and grammar education institutions have always been less favoured over the
years
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. To start with, among all four secondary centres, specialist
schools
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 had been recorded at an average of 11% in almost a decade, which makes them the lowest in percentage
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While
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 experienced a decline to half of their original figure (24% to 12%) in just 9
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, voluntary-controlled and
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 school trends were reversed along the way. Voluntary-controlled education facilities started at their peak at slightly above 50% in 2000 but dropped by two-fifth of their original numbers by 2009.
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initially
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 started low
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 at 12% just like specialist but
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 increased to almost tripled each year, noting a stable increase to 32% and 58% in 2005 and 2009 respectively. In conclusion, voluntary-controlled
schools
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 dominated in the early year
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 but were replaced by
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schools
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. Grammar and voluntary decreased over time, specialists remain stable, yet
community
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schools
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 ruled in the chart.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words schools, years, community with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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