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Today, there is a group of people who do the same thing every day and avoid variations in their life. Contrastly, there is a group of people who think that changes help to become the best version of yourself.

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Nowadays some
people
 do the same thing every day and avoid variation throughout their whole
life
.
Conversely
 exist who think that
change
 is a wonderful thing. In my view, I prefer the changes in my
life
.
However
, the following essay takes a look at both sides of the argument.
To begin
 with, those
people
 who do not want
change
 in their
life
 and avoid
change
. I think
that is
 not the correct way. They absolutely will regret their elderly time, especially if they do not want to
change
.
Life
 is not an interesting place,
although
 it depends on us. Because we should do interesting, exciting things that we do not regret.
However
, many
people
 would like changes in their time on Earth. I believe it is the correct way. It is the best of all options that we could take.
Firstly
, because of that they can survive and develop themselves. Changes are always exciting at the same time difficult.
Secondly
, it is so funny! They experience a lot of adrenaline when they become better. After that, they feel that in the world no existing
people
 who are so happy like or more them. It is an amazing feeling. Thusly I would so you can understand the superiority of the second
type
 of
people
 will better than the first
type
. Despite being a supporter of
this
 "wanting
change
"
type
 of
people
, I am not vehemently opposed to the "first
type
" of
people
.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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