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The diagrams below show how glass containers, such as bottles, are produced and recycled.

The diagrams below show how glass containers, such as bottles, are produced and recycled.
The first diagram gives information about the process of container production,
while
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 the second diagram illustrates how
glass
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 containers are recycled.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 producing
glass
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 containers, like bottles, consist of four stages, and it requires five steps to recycle used
glass
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. In the production of
glass
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, the first stage is when sand, soda ash, limestone and other chemicals are mixed together.
The next step is
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 the melting. The mixture is heated in a
glass
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 furnace at about 1500°C. The molten
glass
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 is shaped with blowing.
Glass
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 containers get ready via his steps.
Glass
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 recycling begins with the collection of used glasses. Collected glasses are classified
according to
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 their colour.
Next,
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in the washing step, the impurities are removed. In the fourth stage of recycling, wasted products are crushed and melted. In its final stage, the
glass
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 is moulded in order to create new items.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words glass with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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