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Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement??

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These days , some people think that the government spends a large proportion of its budget not only on
education
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 and public
service
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 but
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 on the Arts.
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 others believe that it's essential to spend
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 on public
service
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, I don't think that investment is a waste of
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. On the one hand , there are several reasons for spending a significant amount of
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 on art.
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art is important to support as provides people with
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 and entertainment.
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, theatres, galleries, museums,operas and other places have an important impact on our society and on people's quality of life as many of them find great pleasure in various performances and different exhibitions.
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 , they are many reasons for spending the amount of
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 on public
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 than on
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 arts. First and foremost, healthcare,
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 institution,public transportation and other areas are the main things that the government has to support financially as it predicts the quality of life that citizens will have.if the government doesn't spend enough
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 on hospitals, the health of our society may decline.
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, if there is a lack of finances in schools , the
education
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 of the next generations can be threatened. Another important point is that the poor can be affected even more as they often have to rely on services that are provided freely for them.
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 , there are clear benefits to ensuring a large amount of investment goes into public
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,
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, it shouldn't be at the expense of art.
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