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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The table provides the share of
students
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 attending four different types of secondary school (
Specialist
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,
Grammar
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, Voluntary-controlled and
Community
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) between the
period
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 of 2000 and 2009. In general, we can see that till 2005 most
students
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 attended voluntary-controlled
schools
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 and
specialist
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schools
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 are least attended by them. The
specialist
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,
grammar
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 and voluntary-controlled
schools
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 show a gradual decline and
on the other hand
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community
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schools
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 show an increase in strength over the
period
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 of 2000-2009. From 2000 to 2005, voluntary-controlled
schools
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 are the most popular among
students
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. There is a shift from voluntary-controlled
schools
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 to
community
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schools
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 from 2005 to 2009 as more than 50% of
students
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 attend
community
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 college in 2009
whereas
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 in 2000 it was voluntary-controlled
schools
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.
Specialist
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schools
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 have been the least favourite as it has the least amount of pupils for the whole
period
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 of time.
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,
grammar
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schools
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 which in 2000 had about a quarter share of pupils halved in 2009.
Moreover
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, there is a general trend of decline in
specialist
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,
grammar
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 and voluntary-controlled
schools
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 where voluntary
schools
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 dropped more than half of their population and
grammar
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 school lost exactly half. The
specialist
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schools
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 only had a minor decline compared to the rest of the two.
On the contrary
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,
community
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schools
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 grew almost four times from a meagre 12% to 58% over the
period
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 of 2000 to 2009.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, specialist, grammar, community, period, schools with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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