#THE CHARTS BELOW SHOWS THE PERCENTAGES OF MALE AND FEMALE STUDENTS GETTING TOP GRADES IN 1960 AND 2000.SUMMARISE THE INFORMATION BY SELECTING AND REPORTING THE MAIN FEATURES AND MAKE WHERE RELEVANT

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The given column graph illustrates the proportion of boys and girls getting top in five subjects which are

science

arts

,maths.language and

humanities

in 1960and 2000.

It is clear that

from the graph girls scored higher in

arts

and languages

whereas

by scored higher in

science

and math in the given years. In 1960 moderately every 30%boys scored good grades in

science

and math

whereas

in languages and

humanities

, the high scorers were 20%each.Only one in ten scored high in

arts

males did much better in language

arts

and

humanities

with 45%,32%and 30%scoring high in these subjects separately.Only 10%girls scored high in

science

and the least 5%scored high scores. In 2000 among boys, the percentage of scores in

arts

and

humanities

almost doubled

whereas

that in

science

and maths became roughly half as contrasted to the figures of 1960.The proportion of top scorers in languages remained the same.Among girls

however

Add the comma(s)

,however

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, the percentage of top scores in art language and

humanities

reduced slightly

whereas

that in

science

and math stayed behind the same.

Overall

it is surprising to see that males scored better than females in

humanities

in the year 2000

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#THE CHARTS BELOW SHOWS THE PERCENTAGES OF MALE AND FEMALE STUDENTS GETTING TOP GRADES IN 1960 AND 2000.SUMMARISE THE INFORMATION BY SELECTING AND REPORTING THE MAIN FEATURES AND MAKE WHERE RELEVANT

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

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