#THE CHARTS BELOW SHOWS THE PERCENTAGES OF MALE AND FEMALE STUDENTS GETTING TOP GRADES IN 1960 AND 2000.SUMMARISE THE INFORMATION BY SELECTING AND REPORTING THE MAIN FEATURES AND MAKE WHERE RELEVANT

#THE CHARTS BELOW SHOWS THE PERCENTAGES OF MALE AND FEMALE STUDENTS GETTING TOP GRADES IN 1960 AND 2000.SUMMARISE THE INFORMATION BY SELECTING AND REPORTING THE MAIN FEATURES AND MAKE WHERE RELEVANT
The given column graph illustrates the proportion of boys and girls getting top in five subjects which are
science
arts
,maths.language and
humanities
in 1960and 2000.
It is clear that
from the graph girls scored higher in
arts
and languages
whereas
by scored higher in
science
and math in the given years. In 1960 moderately every 30%boys scored good grades in
science
and math
whereas
in languages and
humanities
, the high scorers were 20%each.Only one in ten scored high in
arts
males did much better in language
arts
and
humanities
with 45%,32%and 30%scoring high in these subjects separately.Only 10%girls scored high in
science
and the least 5%scored high scores. In 2000 among boys, the percentage of scores in
arts
and
humanities
almost doubled
whereas
that in
science
and maths became roughly half as contrasted to the figures of 1960.The proportion of top scorers in languages remained the same.Among girls
however
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, the percentage of top scores in art language and
humanities
reduced slightly
whereas
that in
science
and math stayed behind the same.
Overall
it is surprising to see that males scored better than females in
humanities
in the year 2000
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