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The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 table illustrates the
number
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 of
students
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 who attended various kinds of secondary
schools
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 from 2000 to 2009.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
students
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 in elementary school dropped significantly in the given time frame.
However
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, the
number
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 of in
community
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schools
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 shows a rapid increase in
percentage
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. In 2000, specialist
schools
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 and
community
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schools
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 had the least
number
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 of
students
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 which is 12%
whereas
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, the voluntary-controlled
schools
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 had the highest
percentage
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 of
students
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 which is 52% and grammar
schools
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 had the second highest
percentage
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 of 24%.
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, in the year 2005 specialist
schools
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 had the lowest
percentage
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 of 11% and the voluntary
schools
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 had 38%
students
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,
however
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, the
community
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schools
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 had 32% strength and grammar
schools
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 got the lowest percentile.
On the contrary
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, in 2009
community
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schools
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 had the greatest
percentage
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 of more than half of the student population which is 58%. The voluntary
schools
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 took the second place with 20% of the
students
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, grammar and specialist
schools
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 were 12% and 10% respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, schools, community, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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