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Some people think that the government should spend money on road systems, while others think car owners who use those roads should pay.

#people #government #money #road #systems #car #owners #roads
It is irrefutable that, cars are the greatest invention
of
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the
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history, with the rise in
its
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 usage across the nation, sustainable
road
 networks are being developed with significant expenditure.
Thus
, few individuals believe that
,
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the rulling
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rulling
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ruling
 party should bare
a
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the
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 cost
for
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road
 systems
while
, others advocate that, travellers on the
road
 ought to pay for it.
However
,
i
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 will discuss both
the
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sides and give my opinion in
upcoming
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 paragraph. To commence, every
country
is build
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 upon merging multiple cities and these cities are well connected
with
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 roads
,
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 so that individuals of the
country
 can travel by
road
seemlesely
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seamlessly
. These citizens of
the
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any
country
pays
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 heavy taxes to the government and it's
a
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responsiblity
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responsibility
 of all
bearucrats
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bureaucrats
 for providing
dividents
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dividends
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 to the population in terms of better facilities .
Moreoever
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Moreover
,
road
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the road
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 system plays a pertinent role in
country's
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the country's
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 economy, because,
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a majiority
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majiority
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majority
 of the trade
are
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 being done with the use of roads.
For instance
, 83% of
the
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india's
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India's
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 trade
is
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occured
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occurs
 on the Indian
road
 network.
On the contrary
, many masses believe that drivers should pay for the cost of
road
developments
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development
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. undoubtedly, car operators are still paying for it, because authorities had developed toll
plaza's
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plazas
plaza
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 on various
junction
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junctions
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 of highways, where drivers are getting charged for using
a
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road
.
Furthermore
,
accrording
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according
 to these
individuals
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individuals'
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perspective
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perspectives
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, if the government of the nation had
took
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an
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the
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 initiative for constructing better
road
 systems
then
, drivers can pay a small amount for
a
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being
a
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privileged. In a gist, I opine that
government
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the government
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 ought to pay for
road
 systems, as they are collecting money from tax-payers, which can be utilized for
country's
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the country's
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 renovation.
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