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Today, many parents force their children to study all kinds of courses in their early age. What are the reasons behind this? What effects do you think this practice would bring to the children?

Nowadays
parents
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 tend to push their
children
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 to study a variety of courses when they are really young. Most
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 do
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 because they are afraid of their
children
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's
future
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, and they want their
children
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 to excel.
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, it is more likely that
children
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 are negatively affected by
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 behaviour. These days,
parents
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 have become more obsessed with the
future
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 of their
children
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, so to prevent the probable misery of
children
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, they force young
children
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 to enrol in many
classes
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.
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 reason, they send
children
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 to many
classes
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, some of which are completely irrelevant.
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, these days it is customary that
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 not only sent their
children
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 to drama
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 but
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 send them to sports and foreign language
classes
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. Another reason is that
parents
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 compare their
children
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 with others who are the same age, so they want that their child be better than others.
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 of
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 endless competition, they force
children
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 to participate in more courses.
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, it is absolutely evident that studying different majors put a huge burden on young
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's shoulder.
Children
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 like spending their
time
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 on activities that provide them with a certain level of freedom, but
parents
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 deprive them of these kinds of activities.
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 will result in emotional problems among young
children
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. Take a primary school student who has spent several hours in numerous
classes
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 after school
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; he may miss quality
time
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 playing with his friends and feel miserable.
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, not having free
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, many young
children
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 may lose their creativity.
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 may have a devastating impact on their
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 life.
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, they cannot be a good writer or painter in
future
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. In conclusion, many
parents
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 believe that they are trying to secure their
children
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's well-being in
future
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 by paying for countless courses, but in reality,
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 attitude may damage both the emotional and cognitive abilities of
children
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. It is better for
children
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 to spend
time
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 with their friends and have fun.
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 would be more beneficial for them.

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