the chart below shows the result of a survey of people who wisited 4 types of tourist attraction in Britain in1999

the chart below shows the result of a survey of people  who wisited 4 types of tourist attraction in Britain  in1999
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given represents the outcome of a pool of individuals who visited different variations of tourist
desireability
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desirability
in
UK
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the UK
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in 1999.
Overall
,
tourists
mostly have been to Theme Parks and Museums and
Gallries
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galleries
. Looking at the spaces visited utmost, at 47
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. Meanwhile, Legoland and
Chessignton
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Chessington
World of Adventures are the least favoured ones, with 10% both. The second most admirable area for visitors
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museums and galleries, which hold 37% of the circle. As to the places which are not as popular among
tourists
as parks and museums, wildlife parks and zoos still took a part of
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. These specific places of fauna beauties are the rock bottom ones, at only 9% of
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. Almost twice greater in percentage spots for
tourists
are Historic Houses and Monuments. These types of areas account for 16% of the data, which puts them in the 3rd place among spaces visited by
tourists
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