Some people think that buildings such as flats and houses should be designed to last a long time. Others believe that is is more important to provide accommodation quickly and cheaply.

Most people argue that opinion
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apartments and houses should be designed in a long time period.
However
, some people think that the big issue is not design.
Otherwise
, accommodations should
provided
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with necessary things. And
also
, it must be
quickly
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and
cheaply
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for poor individuals. In the first place, nowadays, some individuals try to build new flats
instead
of avoid to being poor without houses. So, when it comes to making a design. It has
a
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good and bad
sides
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.
For example
, it might be a high
costly
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.
Furthermore
, it takes too much time to decorate.
However
, it would be really better.
This
is because it can
makes
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us feel thrilled.
Besides
, more and more mankind want to adorn their homes. And
also
, it is becoming
popular
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thing day by day.
On the other hand
, the
demands
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of
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housing is
growth
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at present. There are several reasons why it is important to build new buildings quickly and efficiently.
This
is because it
really
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related to the increasing of
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citizens. First and foremost, more citizens need a house to live
.
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Therefore
,
government
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should be cautious and supply
with
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home
equipments
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.
Moreover
, the public
have
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to focus on the price of
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which is affordable. And
also
, they must be careful
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the house quality. It is common knowledge that it depends more on the developers. I mean, its quality and time should be built by professional builders. In conclusion, it is my perception that supplying
with
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accommodations is
better
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way than
design
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other flats. And it would be equal
to
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all
of
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individuals
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the individuals
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.
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