The bar chart shows the top ten countires for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and make comparison where relevant.

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The horizontal bar graph illustrates the world ranking

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both

comsumed

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combined

and produced

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amounts

of electric power in 2014.

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all nations nominated minor

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between their own

comsumption

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consumption

and production, the top two countries, namely China and USA marked the

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measurable

volume in their electric industry compared to other following eight countries.

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with, the most significant figure can be seen in Chinese data where both numbers for consumption and production surpassed over

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5300 billion

in the designated year.

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record is

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remarkable, standing at roughly

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4000 billion

in both categories, which was almost quadruple of Russian data which was placed

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third. From

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on, other nations' levels

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ranged between 1000 billion and 400 billion. The fourth country, Japan consumed and

peoduced

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produced

more than double

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Korea, which placed

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tenth, did in the year.

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these countries, India, Canada, France, Brazil and Germany were nominated.

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, it was interesting that Germany marked only

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that the number of consumption outnumbered that of production.

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Topic Vocabulary:

megawatt-hour (MWh)
capacity
output
distribution
consumption
production
renewable energy
non-renewable energy
surplus
deficit
trend
pattern
discrepancy
regional
anomaly

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