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The bar chart shows the top ten countires for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and make comparison where relevant.

The bar chart shows the top ten countires for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and make comparison where relevant.
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The horizontal bar graph illustrates the world ranking
according
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 both
comsumed
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combined
 and produced
amont
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amounts
 of electric power in 2014.
Overall
,
while
 all nations nominated minor
difference
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differences
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 between their own
comsumption
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consumption
 and production, the top two countries, namely China and USA marked the
mesurable
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measurable
 volume in their electric industry compared to other following eight countries.
To begin
 with, the most significant figure can be seen in Chinese data where both numbers for consumption and production surpassed over
5300billion
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5300 billion
 in the designated year.
Likewise
,
American
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 record is
also
 remarkable, standing at roughly
4000billion
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4000 billion
 in both categories, which was almost quadruple of Russian data which was placed
at
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the
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third. From
then
 on, other nations' levels
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ranged between 1000 billion and 400 billion. The fourth country, Japan consumed and
peoduced
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produced
 more than double
amount
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than
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 Korea, which placed
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the
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tenth, did in the year.
Btetween
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Between
 these countries, India, Canada, France, Brazil and Germany were nominated.
However
, it was interesting that Germany marked only
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a trend
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 that the number of consumption outnumbered that of production.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hour (MWh)
  • capacity
  • output
  • distribution
  • consumption
  • production
  • renewable energy
  • non-renewable energy
  • surplus
  • deficit
  • trend
  • pattern
  • discrepancy
  • regional
  • anomaly
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