The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009.
The table chart provides information about the percentage of participants attending four different school types from 2000 to 2009 the level of contribution of grammar
years
. Overall
, the contribution of some schools
changed significantly . Only specialist schools
show stable value , in all years
statistics the same .
The highest value of proportion take
voluntary-controlled Wrong verb form
taking
schools
in two years
was 52 per cent
and 38 per cent
( in 2000 and 2005 years
respectively ) . And the highest value of proportion in 2009 show
community Fix the agreement mistake
shows
schools
was 58 per cent
. UnfortunatelyAdd a comma
,
schools
decreased from 24 per cent
to 12 per cent
.
To sum up
, trough the time preference of people changed . And in 2009 children likely to attend community schools
than voluntary-controlled schools
. Thus
community schools
take the top in 2009 , while
others contributed only 42 per cent
overall
in 2009 . , , .Submitted by muharodnoy on
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