The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009.

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, the contribution of some

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changed significantly . Only specialist

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show stable value , in all

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statistics the same . The highest value of proportion

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voluntary-controlled

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in two

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was 52 per

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and 38 per

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( in 2000 and 2005

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respectively ) . And the highest value of proportion in 2009

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community

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the level of contribution of grammar

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decreased from 24 per

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to 12 per

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, trough the time preference of people changed . And in 2009 children likely to attend community

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than voluntary-controlled

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take the top in 2009 ,

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others contributed only 42 per

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