You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job.

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I hope

this

letter finds you in radiant health and the best of

spirit

Fix the agreement mistake

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. I hope

this

letter with crucial purpose is complaining about three months ago , I purchased a Dell laptop from your store.Because

this

device does not

work

. I want to

work

at home .

For

this

reason, I bought

this

computer. On the one hand first and important thing , I broke my left been

last

2 years ago my break left leg. So I

work

at home.I teach children English online through a laptop.But

this

device worked for a full 1 week.

However

this

computer

doesn't

Correct your spelling

won't

work

next week. In relation to the specifics of the problem, the laptop screen does not show anything except a black screen with some red dots on it.

For

this

reason, I would ask you to repair or replace

this

device because it is important to me

Finally

, having given the previous facts you will an immediate action in forward to hearing from you in the near future.

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1Word repetition
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2Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

169 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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