People nowadays are not fit and active than the people from the olden days. Discuss the causes for this situation and suggest some possible solutions.
Today more and more of us living in the modern era are having less quality of health
compare
to generation in Change the form of the verb
compared
previous
era. Change the article
the previous
This
mainly
because of the lack of physical activities and the consumption of fast Add a missing verb
is mainly
food
on
their daily routines. There Change preposition
in
are
Change the verb form
is
number
of solutions which should be implemented to deal Change the article
a number
the number
these
poor lifestyles.
One of the biggest problems facing people who live in Change preposition
with these
this
era is the low rate of physical exercise. In many big cities, citizens tend to spent
their Change the form of the verb
spend
time
in the building area for daily activities , and they are forced to spent
long hours Change the form of the verb
spend
in
Change preposition
apply
indoor
. Correct your spelling
indoors
For instance
, corporate employees have to sitting
nine hours per day in front of their computers, school students have to be in the class facing the materials and laptops for eight hours on weekdays . Change the verb
sit
These
lead them to have Correct pronoun usage
This
limit
Replace the word
limited
time
on doing the exercise. To solve this
problem, all the institutions should provide fitness programs to their members, and to make it successful companies should give sport
facilities for their employees and schools has to promote Change the noun form
sports
wide
range of fun Add an article
a wide
the wide
sport
classes for students.
Another issue is the Change the noun form
sports
consumptions
of fast Fix the agreement mistake
consumption
food
. The number of fast
Add a hyphen
fast-food
food
restaurants are
increasing in all areas around the world, and there is a great deal of consuming Correct subject-verb agreement
is
the
junk Correct article usage
apply
foods
. Fast Fix the agreement mistake
food
foods
have some major interests to attract us in eating them, for instance
, their instant serving, tastes, and affordable prices are well presented to the public. At the same time
, people are getting busier every day, instant foods
tend to be a solution when they feel hungry in
almost all occasions. Change preposition
on
This
poor eating lifestyle let them accumulate massive
amount of bad calories in their bodies in the long term period. Add an article
a massive
This
problem could be addressed by introducing a healthy food
eating trend to the
society, people should increase their awareness Correct article usage
apply
on
Change preposition
of
food
nutrition to understand and avoid negative
impacts of junk Correct article usage
the negative
foods
,
and start to invest more Remove the comma
apply
time
to cook healthy foods
at home.
To sum up
, although
it is clear that
today’s societies face a range of health issues, it is undoubtedly possible to start to tackle these problems,
and improve their Remove the comma
apply
health’s
quality. Institutions and citizens should work together in dealing with these major problems.Change noun form
health
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite