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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend latge sums of money on constructing new railway lines for fast trains in cities. Others believe the money should be spend on improving the existing public transport. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Recently, in many ,nations certain individuals believe it is important to spend more funds on building new
railway
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lines
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 for very fast
trains
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 in towns
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 some think the cash should be spent on developing available used public
transport
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. I believe building new
railway
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 station van help for another easy means of
transportation
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 without traffic
accidents
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 and
road
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 congestion and maintaining the existing
transport
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 will prevent too much expense in order to promote support for their
people
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.
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, creating a new mode of
transportation
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 like the
railway
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lines
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 for
trains
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 will help
people
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 to get to their destinations without delay as they are able to travel far distances in their country for different purposes
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 as trading and holiday.
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 will help develop cities and reduce
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 traffic
accidents
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 and pollution which can be detrimental to
people
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's health and way of living.
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,
people
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 will feel safe and convenient traveling and
trains
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 convey a lot of
people
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 for
transportation
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 making it easier for individuals to strive for their daily needs.
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, in ,China there are many
railway
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 stations which have helped the country to grow because of its population reducing traffic
accidents
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 and
road
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 congestion making it easy for them to move from one place to another.
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, I believe maintaining the existing
transport
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 will help to reduce expenses that can be spent on building new
railway
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lines
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 for
trains
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 as
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 will make the government spend money on other important ways of developing the available
transport
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that is
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 used in their cities.
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, there will be a reduction of crises like economic crashes that can arise from building new
transportation
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 thereby promoting
people
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's way of life without fear of striving to live.
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 a research study by Williams James states that 70% of countries that maintain their existing
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 find it easy to support their
people
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 and develop their nation. In conclusion, many countries in the World build new
railway
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lines
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 to convey as many
people
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 as to their destinations and reduce
road
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accidents
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 and congestion.
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, it is best to improve their existing
transportation
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 to prevent expenses that can cause the fall of their country economically.
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