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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world?

#development #tourism #english #language #world #people
Well, there is no doubt that
english
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 become
very
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 common
language
 nowadays as
people
 can easily increase their business at
global
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 level if they know
english
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.
Nevertheless
 ,
due to
this
 ,some
people
 forget their moral and transitional values , which is very hard to ignore .In
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i
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 will explain the merits and demerits of having
single
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language
 in
this
world
. To commence with
first
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 and foremost
view point
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 that
people
 have to speak one
language
 because they can easily explore
there
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 market and business in each and every country without any
language
 fear .
Moreover
 ,
people
 can communicate and make friends in any country, in the other way , they can increase their network cycle and enhance their
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while
 talking with each other
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single
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language
 . Adding more ,
people
 can
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 understand each other doing travelling
other
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nation
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 museums and historical sites and monuments as well .
Depite
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Despite
 these
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 points , there
are
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number
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 of negative effects of having
single
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language
 .
Firstly
 ,
people
 can easily forget and remove their
culture
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 values
with
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 English
culture
 which is not good
of
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 them because
culture
 and
language
 are the main key to
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 the
persons
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person
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.
Additionally
 , every
culture
have
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their
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 own
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 which give them different personality and values in
this
world
 .
Hence
 different languages help to maintain
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equality in
this
world
 and they can stay connected with their history parts and events .
To conclude
,
although
 having solo
language
 in
this
world
 is not
bad
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 idea
to
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 rising business ,
nonetheless
 with
this
 ,
people
 normally forget their
culture
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 history which is very worse
of
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 upcoming generations
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prominent
  • Contribute
  • Global
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
  • Communication
  • Understanding
  • Ease
  • Business
  • Trade
  • Cultural exchange
  • Unity
  • Access
  • Information
  • Simplify
  • Travel
  • Tourism
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