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Some people think that children should do homework every day because it can help them greatly. Others think that it can give them a lot of pressure. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #children #homework #pressure
While
 it is often thought that
students
 ought to be given
homework
 every
day
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 them
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,others think that
this
 can give
students
 a
lot
 of stress.In my opinion,
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 consider that when
teachers
 give
tha
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the
students
 a
lot
 of
homework
 every
day
 they can not enjoy when they go to
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school,and they will hate
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teachers
. On the one
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,it is commonly believed that when
teachers
 give the
students
 a
lot
 of
homework
,it is good and important because they can practice and they can improve their skills in
this
 subject.
Furthermore
,when
teachers
 give the
students
 a
lot
 of
homework
 every
day
,they can get a
lot
 of information,and when the exam comes,they do not need to study hard because they
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practice
eveey
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every
day
, so the exam will be
as a result
 they can get good marks and when
teachers
 give the
students
 quiz,they can answer well because they practice every
day
,so they
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 anytime.
On the other hand
,it is commonly believed that when
teachers
 give
students
 a
lot
 of
homework
 every
day
 it is boring,and
i
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 agree.
This
 is because the
students
 can not play when they return home and they will do the
homework
with out
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without
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 foucs,
for instance
,when the
students
 have
homework
 every
day
,they will do it fastly
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without
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 foucs because they want the
markes
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grades
of
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homework
.
Furthermore
, when
teachers
 give the
students
homework
 every
day
,it will be bad because the
students
 have a
lot
 of
subject
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 if they want a good result,
for example
,when
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 teacher
give
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students
 a
lot
 of
homework
 they can not
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focus
 on the other subjects. In conclusion,
while
 people may
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 in their opinions
i
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 think that
teachers
 should not give the
students
 a
lot
 of
homework
 every
day
 because it will give them
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negatively
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 in the other subjects.
Teachers
 can give the
students
homework
 on weekends that will be good.
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