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Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy for them. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

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In today's world, it is an undeniable fact that most
the
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people require
pets
 as their companions to kill their loneliness. Some people believe that keeping
pets
 can harm or cause illness to babies
while
 others think that
this
 responsibility will bring positive changes in their life. I firmly believe that
,
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 keeping
pets
 can give a good impact on babies. In the looming paragraphs, I will discuss each aspect in detail. On one hand, keeping
pets
 will encourage kids in gaining vast knowledge emotionally and in developing a caring attitude towards others.
Moreover
, it has been seen that
children
 who are in touch with domestic breeds since their birth are more trustworthy.
For instance
, it has been seen in a recent study that
children
 who are associated with
pets
 have more empathised behaviour toward others.
On the other hand
, other individuals keep
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 that keeping domestic animals will affect one's health as their furry body is attracted to bacteria and pesticides, which is very harmful to
children
 as their immune system is prone to infection.
For example
,
Roundworm
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 can be seen in
children
 who get in touch with
cat
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a cat
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 who is suffering from
infection
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an infection
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. In a nutshell,
pets
 are a fine addition to families with babies.
Children
 having
pets
 is still a debatable topic among many, but I believe keeping domestic breed can bring a feeling of responsibility, care and pleasure in
children
 which can positively impart in their adulthood development.
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