The money spent by governments on space program would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that identical proportions of
students
from both genders should be admitted/accepted when universities consider enrollment.
However
, I completely disagree with
this
proposal/scheme.
To begin
with, the states have already collected
fees
through
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many ways. All
spendings
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by residents would involve a part of
acedemic
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academic
taxes. So the
students
who are studying in private
schools
have paid educational taxations on their
tuition
.
For example
, if someone paid his
school
tuition
, a small part of his
tuition
would be possessed by the management which is work for education.
In addition
,
the
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private
school
students
do not get any knowledge or advantages from the public academic system. The
students
would be unwilling to pay money to state
authourities
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authorities
. The families would suffer from more economic stress if states ask taxes from them. The
tuition
fees
of private
schools
are more expensive than the
fees
in
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the
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public
schools
. Additional
fees
may cause some financial
crisis
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to
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specific families.
Furthermore
, their life
declines
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, which might lead to disappointment with
governmnets
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governments
government
.
For example
, a poor family afford their kids to
the
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primary
school
,
they
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have not only
pay
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the expensive fee from
schools
, but
also
the taxes from
state
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education system. They have to give up to let their kid go to
school
. In conclusion, my view is that the selection of university
students
should be based on merit, and it would be both impractical and unfair/unreasonable to change to a selection procedure based on gender.
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