The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of

new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

 make comparisons where relevant.
The graph given depicts the number of shops which closed and opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
Overall
, the number of
shop
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shops
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that
openings
decreased over the period given. Meanwhile, the number of
shop
closures
increased
in
Change the preposition
at
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the end of the period. To start with, in 2011 the
shop
openings
was
Change the verb form
were
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roughly 8500
stores
and the
closures
shop
at 6500
stores
which meant that
opening
Correct article usage
the opening
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shops higher than
closures
Correct article usage
the closures
show examples
.
In contrast
, the opening of shops declined substantially to 4000
stores
,
while
the
shop
closures
dropped slightly to 6000
stores
in 2012.
Moreover
, over the next two years, the
shop
openings
surpassed the
shop
closures
. Turning to 2015, the
shop
closures
plunged sharply to
its
Correct pronoun usage
their
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lowest at under 1000
stores
,
whereas
the
shop
openings
fell moderately to 4000
stores
.
Furthermore
, in 2016, the opening
shop
took its place again as the highest and remained constant until 2018,
while
the
openings
,
conversely
went down.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words shop, openings, closures, stores with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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