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Many people nowadays don't feel safe either when they are at home or go out.What are the reasons and What can be done to solve this problem?

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There is no doubt that increasing today A lot of
people
 feel unsafe yourself their homes or somewhere.How to solve that issues.
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analayse
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analyse
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 some problems. The reason why
people
 are afraid of going out of their houses or
visit
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 other cities
and
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are very obvious. Because You can across many crimes on the street. Road mishaps have risen to a proportion,more than ever before and continue
increase
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 every day.Some
people
 are incredibly afraid and unsafe because of the fear of natural calamities and
also
 Many social media are watching a lot of scandal and other terror attacks
that
is
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 given by journalists.
As a result
, Humans feel afraid in their houses. At the same time, Most
of
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the
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people
 believe that
unsafe
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 within their homes The main reason for
this
 issue.
This
 time is
ingcreasingly
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increasingly
increasing
crime and terror attacks in the city or somewhere like murders.
In
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a recent news
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such
 as
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 or other social media conceal some crime communities. Their certain steps which can be taken by the
goverment
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government
and individuals Particularly Nowadays
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employment
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in employment
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 persons in the world
That is
 why
government
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 should provide
with
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good job opportunities. If
people
 are provided new jobs or vocational training by
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the govermant
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govermant
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government
Crimes are reduced all over the world.
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fot
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for
check
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to
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the police. The conclusion you can across many crimes all over the world So many
people
 unsafe at their houses but
this
 situation can be mitigated by taking some measures and unemployment problems.
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