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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. Do the advantages of this trend outweighs the disadvantages.

#university #students #part #studies #trend
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 in studying
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outside side
 countries
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to get more knowledge and to provide more science to their country is
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 common idea these days, in
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 will set some
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student
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 who travels for study purposes
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the
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 right side of improving
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 own mind which leads to the future, the advantage of going
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 to get more
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 is a very great idea to improve
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 mind and the way of thinking, student seeking
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a new cultures
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 and
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situations
 are mostly kind of people that know how to fight,
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 they can depend on them self and
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don't
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help, that
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 them a chance to challenge and behave like
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 adult,
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 studying abroad are
bulding
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building
 a strong responsibility and how to deal with specific situations. now a day
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parents
 should
cargre
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carry
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 their children to travel and study for
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 own goods.
On the other hand
, there are too many disadvantages we can discuss
such
 as lowering children's limits in thinking and searching for there needs of others. The longer you live the more you realized that the only truly exists in
this
 world is how we treat our family and how we push them to increase their knowledge and open minds we are
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 them by controlling them and
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thim
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them
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cycle of education.
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 of
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 the disadvantage,
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 students should give more and push themselves and offence to collect more information and
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 them self by studying
outsideside
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outside side
 their homes.
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