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People think that students should do work before hiring university study.To what extent do you agree.

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Students
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work
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 before employment high education system
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study
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to study
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who
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what
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 people think . I agree with
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 idea and
this
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 is
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experience
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an experience
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 benefit for
students
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 but if
students
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work
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t
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 graduate universities maybe they aren'
t
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studys
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studies
study
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the
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 result
of
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,
students
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working
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work
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 before hiring
unversity
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university
study
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 so
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work
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useful
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them
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to them
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their
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in their
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 life and
professional
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professionally
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last
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 ten years
befor
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before
students
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t
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experience
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work
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 so they didn'
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good
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job
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then
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,
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this
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 people don'
t
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work place
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workplace
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. So nowadays
peope
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people
 want that
students
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need
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toneed
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work
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 before hiring
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for universities
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universities
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university
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to study
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study
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studies
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students
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work
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 before university so maybe it has bed effect
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on their
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study
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thus
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 situation. Because they don'
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for their
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study
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 so they read
bed
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in bed
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 and they don'
t
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echevment
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achievement
ther
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their
the
job
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of
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apply
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day l read
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an American
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 magazine
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 information.
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 magazine wrote about it. They wrote both of them read and
employment
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employed
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students
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students
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 must
experience
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 their profession so it will
be
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improv
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improve
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job
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To Sum up
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,
students
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echivement
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achievement
 their
job
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 if they have
experience
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.
This
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 is
result
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the result
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 maybe
they
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their
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 knowledge
aren'
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isn't
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t
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 good but they
learning
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learn
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 a lot of information
their
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from their
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work
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. I have
tryed
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tried
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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