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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#experts #children #language #school #outweigh
A number of
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researches
researchers
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study
 other languages from the first
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 of school has more benefits
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 starting later. I suggest that obtaining more information
due to
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language
 and getting more friends
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 the biggest
advantages
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,
nevertheless
, forcing
children
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study
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difficulty
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the difficulty
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 of
studing
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studying
this
 are
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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. It is clear, that with knowledge of other
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language
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 minors can receive more data and find more friends. During
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 way
child
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a child
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 is
studing
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studying
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a foreing
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foreing
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foreign
language
, he or she can use different sources of information on another
language
 to develop his or her personality and free time activities,
moreover
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 of
language
 skills
make
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 it easier for kids to find mates in any part the world, leading to improving social skills.
For example
, the
last
 British research found out that 87% of
children
which
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 know at least one extra way of speaking have more friends outside their motherland, and
as a result
 they are more open
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community
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the community
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. Despite these advantages, against the personal wishes of
young
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generation
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 some teachers push them to spend more time
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 studies, and not everyone can handle
studing
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studying
 another
language
. Schools can make work
day
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 longer in order to have more time for teaching
language
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 can be harmful
for
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children
 and
as a
result
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 their mental condition will be damaged.
Also
, not every minor
have
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 enough skills to learn other
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languages
, during their studies they can simply be disappointed in
language
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 because of difficulty and stop improving it.
For instance
, BBC
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published a programme, where they mentioned that just under 60% of all minors after graduating do not
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continue
 to
study
langueges
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languages
 because of bad
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experience
experiences
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school. In conclusion, learning extra languages in primary school can be advantageous if it allows
children
 to
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analyse
 more information and find more comrades.
However
,
studing
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studying
language
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for
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 them, educational system
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 to create
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more
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easier way to
study
 that.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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