Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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cause of

health

problems comes from

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manufactured

food

or beverage containing excessive

sugar

.

Thus

, some people argue that raising the

price

of manufactured

food

and

drink

will reduce the consumption rate of that goods. I partially agree with

this

mechanism as it will bring an immense benefit. It is widely accepted that people are more selective when purchasing an item.

Therefore

, making manufactured foods and drinks to be expensive will likely solve the issue. Another point to be considered is

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since

sugar

can be addictive, limiting a person to buy one by setting a higher

price

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that product will impede the addiction.

For example

, an expensive carbonated

drink

can shift

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priority to

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other products.

However

, there are some alternatives that might support the increase in

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the price

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of produced

food

and

drink

.

Although

focusing on getting these items to be expensive will work, the companies of the healthy alternatives should

also

lower the

price

of their product.

This

reckons the market reality that cheaper

price

is more attractive regardless of the sold product.

For instance

, people will be attracted to the low-cost

eatery

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compared to the expensive yet manufactured ones.

Moreover

,

health

coverage is the most expensive priority ,

whereas

, every individual tries to avoid it.

Additionally

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not covering

health

issuance

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issues

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due to

sugar

might be the most effective solution

of

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reducing

sugar

consumption per person. In conclusion, increasing the

price

of manufactured goods, especially

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drink

and

food

, might contribute to the decrease in

digesting

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sugar

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.

On the other hand

, I hold the view that limiting the

health

insurance for

sugar related

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illness

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will have the greatest effect in solving

this

issue.